What Do You Think of My Poem Called “the Choice”?
Question by Sweetcess13: What do you think of my poem called “The Choice”?
I posted this earlier so I want to start by saying if there are any mistakes I am sorry I’m using my phone to post this. I also want to say this poem has to do with my biological dad and his addiction with drugs and alcohol. The other person this poem refers to is my stepdad who I consider my father more so than my biological one. So please let me know what you think of it.
The Choice
The day you chose it over me, is a day I’ll never forget.
You left me feeling unwanted and that’s something you should regret.
I’ve cried and cried, til I realized you weren’t worth my tears.
I have someone who’s better than you, and loves me the way I need him to.
You’ve broken my heart, but you’ll never know.
I just thank God I have someone I can rely on.
This person I have I’ll never let go, they are there for me I’ll always know.
The choices you’ve made, it effects me no more.
Because I have someone who loves me enough to be in my life.
I thank God for them everyday, because I don’t know where I’d be without them here today.
Best answer:
Answer by 5 ft 7 Texas Heaven
I answered earlier referring to “it” and in your details before the poem, why not include the addictions, related to him, in the poem? “It” as used is vague. Spill the beans as to the why for the rest of the piece and your bond with your stepfather.
Answer by concernedjean
I want to address the thoughts rather than the poem itself.
I’m sorry you had to go through this.
There is a program called “Alanon” or “Alateen” – for family members of alcoholics – alateen is for young people who have been affected by alcoholism in their family or friends. They will really understand what you have been through and can give you support and steps to help you deal with these difficult feelings. There is no charge for the program – just a donation of whatever you can afford. All the best.
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